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By lunch, Natalie had grown increasingly more impatient waiting for her husband to call her. She had not heard from her husband, Leo, since late last Tuesday. Recently, Natalie’s father had called her to ask her to come visit him in Westchester, Virginia because Natalie’s mom was dying because of breast cancer. When Natalie got to Virginia, she knelt down next to her mother’s bed in tears praying. Natalie’s mom was still in a coma, but Natalie still whispered to her, “Get better, please get better mom.” Natalie stayed overnight lying on a cot next to her mother’s bed. The next morning, she awoke to the sunrise and her mother calling her name softly, but just loud enough to hear. The doctor came in and ran some standard tests to just see how Mrs. Rabelais was doing this morning, but the doctor was shocked when she started talking to Molly and she actually responded. The doctor went away to go get the hospital release form. When she came back, Molly was talking to Natalie and hugging and kissing was going on. Both of them were crying as well, when the doctor interrupted. She told Mrs. Rabelais that she would be released tomorrow morning at 10:30. Natalie’s flight back to Santa Barbara, California was tomorrow as well, but at 11:00. She had to say goodbye early to both of her parents and “jet” off to the airport. She said her goodbyes and left only to find another problem: Her husband had not even check up on her.
She had expected a call each night from her husband, but she had only heard from him that Tuesday. Leo was responsible which left Natalie very puzzled. But she couldn’t do anything at the airport, as she had no time to call him. So she flew all the way back and tried again at the SBMA (Santa Barbara Municipal Airport) but no one picked up her call. She drove briskly back to her house. When she got there, she discovered some shocking news.

15 Responses

  1. I am sorry that it is not that long.

  2. natalie? leo? ok then.
    its not bad at all. i want to see what develops.
    can i give u some constructive critisisms? u just might not want to use because so much in the first paragraph. k. prty good.
    u might want to try heirachinig ur pages like abby and i do that way we dont have so many random pages for chapters. but thats just because we have 2 stories. XD

  3. i know…sry about a lot in first and little in second. SO MUCH WORK TONITE!!!1

  4. natalie and leo… just like the names or is there a lil sumthin sumtin i need to kno

  5. well robin told us that if people are nice to us, then we will use “them” in our books.

  6. ya idk if id ever do that really

  7. actually she said if they were mean to us we’d put them in our storys as mean characters to get revenge. its all in prespective.

  8. i get it now

  9. why did you have to use my name and leo’s. couldn’t you have used olivia’s. i bet something bad is going to happen. isn’t it. Some constructive critism is that you have too many short sentences and sabsab5431 is right don’t overuse the word because.

  10. ya um…that was suspenseful….how about u use urself as well as other people instead of the just “other people” part. (its okay u dont have to include me i can take a hint)

  11. wow…who cares who is in the book….RUDE!!

  12. It’s cool. I want more. I frankly could care less about your grammar and character names.

  13. what do you mean rude for
    you should have told me you were going to put me in a story
    we could have discussed this
    you should have chosen oli
    no offense or anything

  14. what do you mean rude for
    you should have told me you were going to put oreo in a story
    we could have discussed this
    you should have chosen oli
    no offense or anything

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